(n-1) blog Entry

Thesis

While Social Security started off as a brilliant program that would be able to sustain itself no matter what changes in populations occurred, changes made to the system have made it so that the program is failing and by the time many people who pay into it reach the age where they could benefit there will be nothing left.

While Social Security started off as a brilliant program that would be able to sustain itself no matter what fluctuations in populations occurred. Changes made to the system have made it so that the program is failing and by the time many people who pay into it reach the age where they could benefit from it, there will be nothing left.

Revision

In 1929 America’s stock market crashed and in the chaos that ensued that incident the nation slipped into an economic depression which has become to be known as the Great Depression. This depression prompted action to be taken by the government and was manifested in President Franklin D. Roosevelt’s New Deal. This deal helped America’s economy in many different ways such as giving the unemployed jobs, improving the standard of living by building new roads and bridges, and giving older workers incentives to retire. This deal provided benefits to retirees, people with disabilities, and the unemployed so that they might survive.

In 1929, America’s stock market crashed. In the chaos that ensued, the nation slipped into an economic depression which has hence become known as the Great Depression. This turmoil prompted the government to take action which was manifested in President Franklin D. Roosevelt’s New Deal. This deal helped America’s economy in many different ways such as giving the unemployed jobs, giving older workers incentives to retire and providing benefits to retirees, people with disabilities, and the unemployed so that they might have economic security in hard times.

Thesis Statement

While Social Security started off as a brilliant program that would be able to sustain itself no matter what changes in populations occurred, changes made to the system have made it so that the program is failing and by the time many people who pay into it reach the age where they could benefit there will be nothing left.

Improvement!

Talking to people face to face has become outdated. Nowadays the need to actually look a person in the face is unnecessary. A couple of years ago we were actually forced to see people in person but thanks to newfangled technology, i.e. social networks, cell phones, we don’t have to! We don’t have to enjoy the smile of another person or the warmth of their hug anymore! We’re free! We have emoticons to express emotions now instead of seeing them and feeling them in person. Plus it’s easier to tell if someone’s telling the truth online. I mean in person sure, you can look into the windows of their soul, hear the intonation of their voice and notice irregular/nervous habits as they talk to you. But in the internet we have text! Unfeeling, up for interpretation, utterly confusing at times text!

Talking to people face to face has simply become outdated in recent days. The need to actually look a person in the face is now unnecessary thanks to newfangled technology (i.e. social networks, cell phones). A couple of years ago we were actually forced to see people in person but we don’t have to anymore! We don’t have to enjoy the little things that come with having an actual conversation with people; the smile of that other person or the warmth of their hug. We’re free from such shackles! I mean in person sure, you can look into the windows of their soul, hear the intonation of their voice and notice irregular/nervous habits as they talk to you. But with the internet we have text! Unfeeling, up for interpretation, utterly confusing text! Using emotions to tell how a person’s feeling? Pfft. Emotions are overrated anyway. They make things complex and add unnecessary drama to life. Besides, we have emoticons to express emotions now.